If anyone in the Geofront had seemed the least likely to be corrupted, it was surely Maya Ibuki. Ask anyone who knows her, and they'd say she was innocent. A cute girl who took her work seriously with a generally pleasant disposition. When would she fall victim to lust?
By popular demand, it's about damned time that we found out.
It had happened a few hours back, when Ritsuko was still trying to work out why the hell everyone was so damned horny all the time. Maya was simply doing her duty. She was sitting at her desk on the bridge, crunching numbers. Running stats. Trying her best not to soak through her underwear. It was the sweetest torture imaginable: Every time she moved, her nipples brushed up against the inside of her bra or her trousers caressed her thighs, or her jacket rubbed her shoulders... It felt like every single erogenous zone in her body had been given an adrenaline shot all at once.
"Say Maya, is that a new haircut?" Asahina asked out of nowhere. "It suits you."
"Not fooling anyone..." Aoba absently muttered. And he was right. Asahina was as affected by this as any of the other men. By this point they'd stopped trying to hide their tented trousers since everyone else was obviously being affected by this... whatever it was. "Maya won't give it up for you any more than Misato would. Can we focus on our work, please?"
"S-sorry..." Asahina blushed and returned to focusing on his work.
"Don't worry, it's not you!" Maya said, genuinely feeling sorry for him. "Whatever this thing is, it's doing a number on our common sense. But we have to stay focused! Everyone is counting on us! Doctor Akagi is working on this at this very moment, but everyone has to do their part!"
Senpai... Thinking about her was a mistake. Maya was a closeted lesbian - if the closet was made of paper which had the writing 'Maya Ibuki is clearly into women' written on it in big block letters. Her heart throbbed, and so did her genitals. They ached to be touched, but Maya was a steady hard worker. Senpai trusted her, Senpai needed her, Senpai... Senpai...
"Ugh! This thing makes no sense at all!" Asahina said, throwing up his arms and spinning around in his chair. Maya risked a glimpse. His uniform had a very prominent bulge in a certain location, and she felt... absolutely nothing for it. Nothing except mild yet growing curiosity. What would it feel like? It's a male power fantasy, right? Convert a lesbian with your dick. Show them what they're missing. That kind of nonsense. Doesn't work like that normally, but with this strange effect humming over the Geofront... "no matter what, I can't find any data on what's going on!"
"We probably won't find it then... But we shouldn't give up anyway just in case I'm wrong," Aoba said. "There must be some way we can find out more information."
Alright then. If that was the case, then...
"I'll go and ask Doctor Akagi for advice," Maya said. She rose to her feet and pointedly ignored the way the two men stared directly at her butt. It wasn't their fault. "If anyone knows what's going on, it must be her!"
So off she went, hurrying down the corridor and - things were worse than she was expecting. There were clear and blatant signs of this bizarre effect influencing the behaviour of staff nearly everywhere she looked. It was more than erections and soaked underwear at this point, some of the staff were even blatantly groping one another and in one case giving a lapdance!
Maya hurried on but her own imagination betrayed her. She imagined it oh so clearly that it hurt, just a little bit. That one woman technician who had been giving that soldier a lapdance in the middle of the corridor. Rolling up her work jacket while she rolled her shoulders and her hips to some silent beat only she could hear...
She couldn't help but imagine what it would be like if she danced for Senpai like that.
As soon as the thought hit her a lightning bolt of pure pleasure shot clear down her spine. She stumbled, braced herself against the wall and took several deep sucking breaths. No, don't think about that. Don't succumb to this - whatever it was. Her hands had been trying to pull up her uniform, but she forced them away and continued moving down the corridor. Don't let this beat you. You're better than this. You're stronger than this, and Doctor Ritsuko Akagi is too smart and beautiful for - Nnnngh, these trousers felt super chaffy all of a sudden.
"Hah... Hahhhh... Hahhhhh..." Maya gasped for air. Sucking on it like she'd just run a marathon. Alright, there was no denying it, she was stupid horny right now. But she had a job to do! Which meant she had to adjust her thinking. If thinking about Doctor Akagi was having this much of an effect on her, then try thinking about it like this instead!
Think about... Think about how happy she would be if Maya helped her figure this out. Yes, that was the ticket. Motivation to solve the problem. She'd give the answer (whatever it might be) and then...
<i>"Well done Maya, you've really impressed me,"</i> Doctor Akagi, her beloved Senpai would say with a twinkle in her eye. <I>"This is exactly what we need to counteract the hornification of anyone in the city."</i>
Hornification. Yes. That was a good word for this effect. She'd have to make sure to suggest that, but in the meantime the fantasy wasn't done quite yet.
<i>"Your ingenuity and hard work may have helped to save the human race,"</i> Doctor Akagi might say. <i>"However can I repay you? A bonus or a raise is surely not enough."</i>
Alright, that was a little unrealistic but Maya held onto that image and then what followed after. Doctor Akagi leaning in while opening up her lab coat to reveal nothing underneath. They steal a quick peck on the lips, and then, their hands get busy...
This.. this was all for the purpose of helping doctor Akagi, and in the process fixing everyone from this hornification problem! How were they supposed to protect the world from the Angels if everyone was too busy screwing all day long after all? Not at all, that was only logical! So she would save them, get praised by Senpai and then perhaps even have a sweet, delicious reward..
"Looking good Maya," a busty intern said. Hold on, she didn't have a body like that before. "How about we catch some drinks after work?"
"Sounds nice!" Maya obliviously answered. Huh, that's weird though. She'd definitely grown... prettier, sexier than usual and that wasn't just Maya's hormones talking. Come to think of it she'd definitely seen some signs of healthier bodies en route so far, especially from those indulging in their newfound lust.
That got her stopping mid-step. Could it be this strange effect wasn’t just influencing people’s sexual desire, but also making their bodies.. Sexier?
"Notice anything... different, senpai?" the intern asked, flipping back her hair and thrusting out her chest. Yep, no question of it. Her body had definitely gotten more appeal.
Such a thought.. It was rather ridiculous, but there was a certain logic behind it. Increase the sex drive, then make everyone more attractive, in turn making it harder for everyone to resist their newly awakened libido. And given the symptoms of arousal seemed to get worse with time.. a feedback loop? That was certainly a worrying thought.. People getting hornier and hotter until nobody can keep their hands to themselves. This was more serious than she had thought!
"Ah, yes... I noticed," Maya said. "You're almost out of uniform... maybe you should get a bigger size for now?" She politely coughed into her hand, oblivious to the irony of the situation. "By the way, do you know where Doctor Akagi is?"
"She's interrogating the Angel," the intern said. Oh. Right, of course. "Maybe the two of us could help pass the time... together?"
Maya nodded. Actually, that sounded like a good idea. If Doctor Akagi was busy, then she should really use this time to maximum effect. She took the intern's hand and dragged her off to the nearest lady's room.
"Quickly, this is our chance," Maya said as soon as they were inside. "We need to work out how this is affecting people."
"Oh, senpai! So forward!" the intern gasped as Maya locked the door and began to unbutton her uniform. The brunette was so focused on denial of her true purpose here that she didn't even notice how the first few buttons she went for had been strained by an increase in cup size. When her body felt so hot and tight already, it had been hard to feel that her tits had actually become swollen.
Far past the point of what could be attributed to arousal, even if that arousal was at once: magnificent, hyper-focused, and unwanted. If she had paid attention, maybe she would have noticed that her pants hadn't been chafing her simply due to the feminine fluids leaking down her legs.
It was because her thighs and ass had plumped up, giving her panties a wedgie and making the increasingly-sensitive flesh bulge out into the strict fabric. Which was then exacerbated by the feminine fluids leaking down her legs.
"S-Senpai! Your breasts! They're growing!"
"Oh, they have?" Maya's fingers didn't stop fiddling herself, but they slowed down, which the horny, corrupt young woman noticed. The one watching, not the one masturbating. "I suppose I can st-"
"N-No, my mistake! I just, wasn't used to seeing your huge melons out of the uniform. I was mistaken. Continue." Maya nodded, and continued to shove her sopping wet fingers in and out of her pussy with a speed that was normally reserved for when she watched 'Curves and Cunts 4'. The intern watched, agonized by the idea that she couldn't play with her own engorged pussy. Nothing really stopped her, but she was too focused on watching Maya's boobs plump up.
It was as if there was a hose shoved right in each nipple, and with each thrust of Maya's fingers, they went up another notch. The brunette's moans grew deeper, as if the accumulation of mass on her chest was affecting her voice. From modest handfuls, they'd grown into what she would have considered worthy of a prostitute.
Now they were melons that neared the size of Maya's intelligent, horny head. More suited for porn than anything as reasonable as prostitution. Maya's boobs continued to expand without end. If she had paid attention she could have stopped. But with the intern urging her forward, Maya willingly shove her fingers in deeper, forcing the tits out further with each thrust. Soon her nipples spurt out with an extra inch of growth, the aureola bubbling up underneath them until they were nearly as big as Maya's pitiful boobs had been to start.
Maya couldn't help but agree, and as sore as her arms were, they found the strength to yank down her pants. Already the experiment's results had spread to the lower region. Not only were her cheeks so plump and wet as to make it difficult to disrobe, but her pussy had begun gobbling up her panties like it was their only fuel source. Maya's deluded state of arousal pushed her back into the wall, the impact making her swollen, puffy, porn-star tits wobble. Normally such a demure scientist, the intern was greatly pleased to see Maya's moans getting sluttier with each furthering of her transformation.
"Mmf, w-wait," Maya said, though neither of them did such a thing. The intern finally even shoved her fingers into her pants to join Maya's masturbation. "If, if, nnnngh, f-fingering made my melons so juicy, su-surely it would be something else for the ass?" She bent over at the waist and turned around. Her booty was shoved right into the intern's crotch.
"Y-You're free to say 'no', but-" The intern was smart, else she wouldn't have been hired. A plump, quivering rump right in front of her? It could only be smacked. Hard. Which caused another inch of flabby adipose to build on Maya's cheeks and extend the jiggle further. Maya groaned, plunging deeper into her own snatch, the face-sized mound of labia now capable of taking in her entire hand without difficulty.
As an orgasm came, most likely not her first, Maya let out a moan of bliss, while her short locks of hair began creeping down her back. She should probably stop, right? This seemed like enough data for now.
<i>"Maya, a good scientist doesn't stop until they've exhausted all possibilities..."</i>
Or... or she could keep going at it a little while longer...See if she could figure out the limits of the changes that could happen to her body... Maybe even get her cute intern in on the action. Ah! But - but that would be a little too silly. There wasn't any chance someone that pretty would be interested in someone like her!
- Back to the present.
- Wait let's continue with this a little longer.
- What happened with the lonely intern anyway?
- Meanwhile, a look at what Asuka and Rei are doing?
- Something else
Ehh, Maya's sexy transformation could use more meat to it. As it stands it's super weak to basically skip the transformation from Maya's point of view, especially since the Drive is supposed to ramp up sensation. This actually seems to be kind of an issue whenever transformations come up in your stuff, they always feel like they're only there by obligation and get skipped over as fast as possible.
ReplyDeleteAs well, pacing wise the ending feels really artificial to just end on Maya just thinking about sex with her intern. Normally that would work for a scene, but since this whole thing is a flashback the setup it promises is pointless since we already have seen Maya at full Drive. The end would work better to either show the sex, or cut to full-corruption Maya leaving her exhausted intern to report her findings to Senpai.
Also the fourth wall jokes about porn clches do more to pull the reader out of the scene than be funny. You might want to rework them directly into Maya's thoughts, possibly as references to in-universe lesbian pornos Maya watches, or just cut them.
Weird, I didn't spot this in my inbox until right now.
DeleteThanks for the feedback, I'll try to work on this. It's a bit snug this weekend due to my workload increasing a *lot* this summer - not just in writing threads but also working hours. This last week was actually especially restrictive on writing time as I had another thing I had to spend a day off dealing with, so that may be why this isn't as good as it could have been.
I'll try to get a rewrite done on this shortly.
Before that, I'd like to nail down what precisely to work on. Here are my thoughts on the matter.
1: Most of the bridge scene seems generally fine, based on what you're saying.
2: Change any mention of lesbian porn cliches to make it clearer that Maya watches them in private.
3: The transformation sequence needs to actually be a sequence. It's too glossed over here.
4: Maybe have the intern figure out what's going on and be the one to push Maya over the edge in an attempt to seduce her.
Anything else you'd like to suggest before I start?
nah, that was all the big stuff.
ReplyDeleteYeah this revision is way better than the first.
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